Wringer- Book:2
Not all days are Welcome to Excitement
The Transit of Venus looked like the eye of Palmer’s pigeon, Nipper while he waddled along and a 10 year- old boy picked him up and he was gone from Palmer’s reach and could do no more.
Palmer was in tears. There was nothing he could do except cry and think about all the good things that had happened to Dorothy, Nipper and himself. Palmer bit his lip as he was trying to hold back tears. He didn’t want to embarrass himself in front of his friends.
“ What have I done?” Palmer thought.
His dad had shot Nipper during that summer that he had most feared.
“I’ll get that pigeon Snots!” Beans shouted.
The next day Palmer would never want to show himself again. Except to Dorothy. He couldn’t be brave, he couldn’t be strong he couldn’t do anything without Nipper. He stared at the ball with the words: Nipper’s ball, on it.
“ Why did you write that on the ball?”, he said to Dorothy.
“ Well, since he liked taking things out of people’s ears you could pull out a tiny bit of it each day and put it in your ear to play with Nipper.”, replied Dorothy.
“ I can’t do that can I?”, Palmer yelled.
He wanted his pigeon back to play with him. Dorothy decided she would go back home. It was getting late now. Palmer decided to go downstairs and eat dinner. It was just cold sandwiches.
“ That’s it to eat?”, Palmer said.
“ Yes it got cold when you were playing with Dorothy,” his mom replied.
He ate his dinner quietly in complete silence. Usually he would eat his dinner with Nipper upstairs but since he wasn’t with him he was about to cry. He threw the sandwich in the garbage and ran upstairs. Palmer put his: DO NOT ENTER sign on his door so no one would come in. Knocking.
“ GO AWAY!!”, he yelled.
All he heard was silence.
Great Work!
ReplyDeleteThat is so good! Are you going to write more of it? I would love to read it!
ReplyDeletenice alternate chapter can you make more?
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story, it captured the sadness, frustration and confusion of a boy who just lost his best friend. It sounded like it could come right out of the 'Wringer' book. ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks KT
DeleteReally Good Job, But I Think You Could Of Removed The Transit Of Venus Part,
ReplyDeleteAnd You Could Of Put A Comma After
'He Couldn't Be Strong' Part, But I Do Like How You Wrote It Just Like The Author Did. If I Didn't Know This Was
Not Written By Him, I Could Be Easily Fooled Into Thinking This Is Legit.
Thanks I might write more and I will keep that in mind.
DeleteI like how this chapter really sounds like it came out of the wringer book. It explains so well the feelings of palmer whe he loses so much that means so much to him.
ReplyDeleteWOW. That is a sad event. I would be distraught if my dad shot my one and only pet. Why did you want to write this though? Do you think it will happen?
ReplyDeleteI think it might happen and i thought of this because when we looked at the transit of venus it looked like that orange pigeon eye that was described in the book
DeleteHey L.C. I really like how you made a connection to the venus transit AND you made a second book for wringer... I've always wondered if there would be a continuation of wriger, luv it :P
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