Friday, June 15, 2012

Untitled (for now) by KP

A lone dog howled, a cry deep enough to wake up the souls of the underworld. At night, the Forgotten Forest was grim, forever shadowed in a thick cloak of black. Not many a soul would dare to venture into its depths during day, much less during the night.

But, Julia West was not the same as you and me. First of all, Julia West was not quite alive. She was a spirit, a ghost. The moon, a day past full, had awakened her and countless others. When all the dead realized what had happened, they strolled into town to reunite with their loved ones. But, being risen from the dead, Julia was a sight of sheer horror for many. All the men of the village had grabbed their pitchforks and knives, and chased her to the Forest. Their cries, filled with hatred, shouted, “Demon!” and “Beast!” She was running straight and forward, constantly glancing over her shoulder in spite. Her loved ones hated and despised her, and after all she’d been through.

Soon Julia could run no farther. She skidded to a halt, thick brambles sewn like spiderwebs in the mess of forest. Turning around, she slowly raised her palms in a gesture of peace, allowing them to see her face. A face of a girl, a daughter, a friend. A large, bearded man’s face slowly came to relization. Quickly though, Julia’s murderer quickly remembered who she was, too. He acted quickly. “Come, thou brave villagers, and let us rid our beautiful homelands of this devil!” He howled, and like that, Julia left both worlds. The living world, and the dead.

11 comments:

  1. Right from the opening line, your writing caught my attention. I want to know more about this Julia West.

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  2. I like the images of a, "moon, a day past half", a grim forest "shadowed in a thick cloak of black" and "thick brambles sewn like spiderwebs in the mess of forest". I could see everything really clearly in my head, like I was there.

    You are a great writer!

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  3. So desciptive! i love your writing!

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  4. I know who wrote this it is: *****. Nice job! I could tell it was you from the beginning. It was really cool how you used that line in the second paragraph where it seemed as if it was in Shakespeare's time. That large bearded man seemed like it was supossed to be Propero. Cool!

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  5. Thank you all for your praise,it means a whole ton! And ha ha,PrettierThanYou,you better not tell anyone!!!!

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  6. Good story, you should write more.

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  7. I loved this one!! The idea of the ghost was teriffic!! The mood was shown very nicely

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  8. Good story and terrific vocabulary. The way you wrote the story was so realistic that I felt like I witnessed the whole scene, therefore I felt scared.........Just a little :-)


    V.F

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  9. wow that was very realistic I got such a clear picture in my mind

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  10. I really enjoyed your writing and I also know who you are... I really enjoyed how you described everything so fluently and it wasn't just random words sticking out in odd places. I hope you write more and if you do I would love to read it.

    Donutlover227

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